Susie prompted us to write a poem on the book Secret Life of Bees. Susie: "Today we are talking about bees or I should say, The Secret Life of Bees, by
Sue Monk Kidd. It is a coming of age story of a young girl, Lily, who
faces loss, abuse and racism in 1960's southern United States."
BEElieve
Invisible seeds plant
chains of doubt
imprison one's thoughts
of equanimity
suppressed wisdom lurks...
drones and workers in the land
of fear and honey,
Sticky thoughts gathered back to the hive,
chains of doubt
imprison one's thoughts
of equanimity
suppressed wisdom lurks...
drones and workers in the land
of fear and honey,
Sticky thoughts gathered back to the hive,
stagnation
stunts growth
Weed Earth's garden
grow humanity
Educate your colony
Educate your colony
Bee different
winds of change ring sweet
Let the buzz be Freedom~
I wrote this poem years ago, about Martin Luther King's dream. I tried to write a different poem, but found it fit the prompt better than anything else I wrote. So, I am guilty of tweaking my poem.
To bee or not to bee... we still walk around chained to each other in doubts and all that fake honey on the shelves that fool us thinking it is just as sweet... we are still trying to tweak that poem...
ReplyDeleteNicely put! Thank you L. Edgar :D
DeleteYes, there are a lot of bees in the mix of this equation!
I really like the way you have used words associated with bees in a different context to express your ideas in this poem. There is a lot of hope in your vision as expressed in the final stanza. It should be as easy to make it a truth by which we live.
ReplyDeleteKerry-Thank you! Yes, when I saw the prompt I remembered this poem, so close to both subjects I knew I had to tweak it. Thank you :D
DeleteLove you're tweaked poem! Perfection!
ReplyDelete"Bee different!"
Hi Yolanda!
DeleteYes Beeing different is good or should I say sweet?! ;D
Thank you!
It really is wonderful! I'm so glad you chose to tweak it for today.
ReplyDeleteHi Razzamadazzle!
DeleteThank you so much :D
I LOVE this poem! Fantastic, kiddo. I also like being able to find the comment form easily, hee hee.
ReplyDeleteI had to tweak it...similar subjects! Thank you so much! I originally wrote it for Martin Luther King's Dream speech. Yes, I know...still trying to decide what to do about the other blog!
DeleteI like this. "Let the buzz be freedom" indeed.
ReplyDeleteI wish it was :D Thank you Mary
DeleteVery clever throughout. I think it is a great idea to go back and tweak a poem - especially one written years ago. I find they need massaging usually anyway, as I have hopefully grown in my knowledge of how to write poetry.
ReplyDeleteHey Ella,
ReplyDeleteCongratulations! You won an autographed copy of Merciless from Brandon Ford, on the Halloween blog posted Tuesday. Send me your address and I'll get it to Brandon. My email is yolandarenee@hotmail.com