No, I think our ISP is making service repairs...I wish for upgrades. Susie asked us to write a poem about the abuse of Women. Yes, today WE SCREAM! March has been set aside by Woman Scream International Poetry Festival, to raise awareness through poetry about violence against women.
Close knit family
clotted with DNA's gelatinous webs
tangled hope spindles
Black mold breathes
darkness breeds dismal swamp
toxins take hold
green spikes suffocate
blue gray mist inward crawls
must rotate crops
a difficult journey
heart shaped swords slash tongues
one trembles forever
glory is flooded
behemoth river opens caution's door
waiting saturated barbs
Fenced chain metal
one crawls around armored dreams
spins glossy silk
Climbing on edge
naked and wet, you re-emerge
escape pinched pot
Folded prayers cast
answered in pressed floral memories
Freedom's price endures
© Ellen Wilson
Adore: "pinched pot"
ReplyDelete"gelatinous web" sounds like a fun science project. :p
Thank you! I was thinking more like toxic mold, but I prefer your view~ :D
Deleteone trembles forever... sigh.
ReplyDeleteI fear it might feel that way~
DeleteI know sad...
"Fenced chain metal
ReplyDeleteone crawls around armored dreams
spins glossy silk"
But emerges naked, if at all . . . Yes, freedom has it's price, and the price is always high though we head toward it anyway, as we must!
I agree we must! When the mind and heart are imprisoned, we can't grow~ It is so worth it-I agree :D
DeleteA strong write here, Ella. That last stanza is my favorite; and yes, for sure, toxic people take many forms!
ReplyDeleteThank you Mary! :D It is a scary world, sometime~
DeleteReally great use of color and texture Ella...are you some sort of visual artist or sumthin? :-P NIce work!
ReplyDeletelol, Thank you! YOU are cute-yeah, something like that~ :D
DeleteFreedom comes with a high price, but we must work toward it. The beginning of it really got me. It seems so many families continue with abuse generation after generation. Thanks for taking part and sharing such a powerful piece!
ReplyDeleteYes, this worries me-the genetic link, or the environmental aspects, or maybe both?! Let's fight for freedom-it is so worth it~ I do think mental illness is the biggest factor~
DeleteThanks Susie
(((hugs)))
a difficult journey
ReplyDeleteheart shaped swords slash tongues
one trembles forever
Been through trying times. Harsh words coming one's way can be very traumatic. Nicely Ella!
Hank
Hi Hank-I know it from an adult view, not a child's. I have toxic in-laws~
DeleteThank you
Your approach to this prompt is outstanding, Ellen. I love the abstract and figurative meaning with which you have infused each tercet. I felt that every stanza had something unique for the reader.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kerry! I really tried to show different forms of toxic~ :D
DeleteLots of specific detail in this--good response to the prompt. Many forms of toxic indeed.
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful. It's certainly haunting despite the metaphorical nature of your images.
ReplyDeleteThank you-it kind of has that creepy mold vibe!
DeleteWow, Ella, this is powerful.
ReplyDeleteProgress is slow in the field of violence toward women. I remember when spousal rape became illegal in Canada. In the 1980s. Imagine! It should have been illegal in the 1880s.
But progress, though slow, is still progress.
K
Hi Kay..
Deletewhoa..that is insane! It is crazy how the world is so fast in many ways and slow when it comes to humanity!
Thanks for sharing~
Hi, Ella... powerful poem... I love the positive ending.
ReplyDeleteHi Laurie
DeleteYes I went dark-thank you!
Freedom of any kind is never easy~
Thank you
Eek! Your poem is so dark, tangled -- and lovely at the same time. You really have a gift.
ReplyDeleteAnd if the net problems turn you into a toad, at least you're close enough to the swamp that you can hop over and play with the other toads! :-D
Each stanza could hold its own really. I liked the last stanza ... folded prayers.
ReplyDeleteI especially admire the "heart-shaped swords" and how "one trembles forever". Legacies of generational pain. Well done, kiddo.
ReplyDeletehappy to see ur blog..beautiful writing..GOD<3U
ReplyDeleteHi Ella! Nice to see you, and your poetry. I love that phrase "heart-shaped swords" absolutely brilliant! Hope that that internet stays up for you. Look forward to reading more poems :-)
ReplyDeleteThe complexity of each stanza requires and educative understanding before the whole poem lets out its secret
ReplyDeleteWonderful writing!
ReplyDeleteGlad to know your blog.
I love the fourth stanza.Quite meaningful.
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