Kerry asked us to play with this form Shadorma. It is a simple syllabic verse form. It is most effective when written using strong words or phrases.
The Shadorma is:
1. a hexastich, a poem in 6 lines
2. syllabic, 3-5-3-3-7-5 syllables per line.
3. unrhymed.
Bee in Bottlebrush
This flower reminded me of fireworks. I went with this idea in my poem.
Hot sparks fly
as desire connects
Latin rhythm hums
steps invite
vertical tango begins
passion's fireworks~
Growth
Green baby crawls
toward sun's juicy rays
birth of Hope
down to Earth
healing wisdom's potential
Mother Nature grins~
Thank you Jaime n' Kerry for this wonderful prompt~
I like the passion's fireworks and birth of hope ~
ReplyDeleteLovely shadorma poems ~
Wow, Ellen...beautiful shadormas, both of them. The first one is 'steamy' hot and the second so very hopeful. They worked SO well with Jaime's wonderful photos.
ReplyDeletenice! sexxxy 'n renewing :)
ReplyDeleteI love the way you saw the bloom as something passionate and explosive, and when I read your image of the baby crawling towards light in the second poem, I thought how truly apt a comparison it is.
ReplyDeleteOh I SO LOVE Mother Nature grinning at the green baby. Lovely, Ellie! I've forgotten how to tango, plus it takes two, but cool slant on the firey red flower, too!
ReplyDelete...that Latin rhythm will do it every time! :)
ReplyDeleteI like the Tango and I like the Hope--both are vivid and happy.
ReplyDeleteThe first one sizzled. So many images came to mind—the sinewy limbs of tango dancers entwining, latin rhythms pulsing, humidity. I love how you allowed your first impression of the bottlebrush to inspire your poem. And the new green shoots of hope are so full of hope!
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you used fireworks in the prompt !!!
ReplyDeleteThe first one dances joyfully among fireworks.
ReplyDeleteThe second one is a song to the miracle of Nature.
Thanks for sharing so much beauty.
:)
I, too, see fireworks and a grin... love them both, Ella!
ReplyDeleteVery apt visualizations that really make the pictures even more awesome than they already are.
ReplyDeleteWow! I recently got introduced to the world of haiku, & it was amazing writing them. The "Shadorma" is an excellent way of writing too. Thanks for sharing :)
ReplyDeleteThank you everyone! I need to try this art form again~
ReplyDeleteIt was a great challenge, but I didn't quite live up to it~
I so enjoyed all of your poems! :D